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I stirred.Then sat straight up suddnely aware to the sudden stop of the birds singing.And saw my cat ,Moi ,swatting at the blue birds on the small flower pot outside my window, and rembered how I had left it open last night. What a stupid girl I am, I thought then ,as if out of nowhere, my mother appeared "Honey you're not stupid" she said then I rembered she could read minds.Then I heard it a train ,but we were miles from a train station ,my mother heard it to and hurried me into the basement.
"Mio!!!"I screamed,"Come here!"The small blue cat ran to my arms.I scooped him up and ran to the basement where my mother waited.I ran down the steps.
I awoke to find my mother no where in site.
To Be Continued....
- by Aprodite_Angel |
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- | Submitted on 12/29/2008 |
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- Title: Storms
- Artist: Aprodite_Angel
- Description: I have no idea where the first part came from.It sucked.
- Date: 12/29/2008
- Tags: storms
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Comments (6 Comments)
- evelynn22 - 08/15/2011
- Honestly? It sucks. There are a few things you could've done to make it better. 1/5
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- Aprodite_Angel - 11/14/2009
- Sorry about the first part. Before I changed some of it. The "Storms" tittle refers to the tornado that sounded like the train when I awoke.
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- Fayne Darkness - 02/12/2009
- Okay, like the last commenter or your other entry; this sucked. Its waaaayyy too short and it makes no sense. There are not enough pauses and you never did continue it. The title has nothing to do with the story. Sorry but only 1/5
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- EmoBananasStoleMyHomework - 01/01/2009
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eeeeerrrrrrmmmm......
punctuation please! it really doesnt make sense to me...
work on the punctuation, make it longer, (waaaaaaaaaay longer) and i will rate better than 1/5 - Report As Spam
- hinata hyuga fan-me - 12/30/2008
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well, its a good story, but i dont understand what the title has to do with the story.
Also i wrote sum stuff 2 if u wanna read them, my newest 1 is "A romantic tragedy". - Report As Spam
- Artemis_012 - 12/29/2008
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write MORE!!!!!!!! PLZ
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