super potato to the rescue

• Artist: Xx_PotatoChica_xX
• Description: This a story about super potato who the best super hero all around MCdonnals and he must save his one true love, and fight this arch enemy.
  will hi win will he get the girl.....
  
• Date: 02/26/2009
• Tags: super patato resue

One morning at McDonalds Super potato was on his usually look out. As he was flying he heard a faint cry in the descents. He flew to the rescue. As soon as he was close enough he realizes that the cry came from Suzie his one true love.
As soon as he got the grease pan he Suzie tied to a rope and Wayne bread laughing. Super potato flew as fast as he can and grabbed Suzie off ‘of her feet. As they flew together Super potato asked “are you ok” “I’m fine” said Suzie. There was a moment of silence then super potato kissed Suzie. Suzie laughed for a minute “what” exclaimed super potato “your mustache tickles” Suzie laughed.
Later that year Suzie and Super potato got married at
Burger king in Vegas and are expending a little spud.

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Comments

[Musically Intoxicated]

Weird use of language there...good luck trying to improve it wink

[Nihill]

More punctuation is needed, as is correct grammar and spelling. Some of these sentences are just nonsensical. I understand it's supposed to be comical, but what is really laughable is your grasp of writing. I do hope English isn't your first language, or if it is, that you're about six years old.