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When I see you all I see
Is that scar on my heart you left for me
What I feel When I'm near you
Is what can't heal even if I chose too
What I can't touch when I hug
Is the emotions you are able to tug
What is loved and thought
and what is shoved and fought
What you will never understand and maybe you will find
Is the emotions you will never feel, and the end of this love line
- by Princeofdarkdestruction |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/16/2008 |
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- Title: Scar
- Artist: Princeofdarkdestruction
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- Date: 07/16/2008
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- Princeofdarkdestruction - 07/20/2009
- I mean My "EX"-Girlfriend
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- Princeofdarkdestruction - 07/20/2009
- at first this was for my girlfriend but i never finished it untill a friend of the family had his heart torn out by the woman he loved so i finish it for him
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- mysticrydder - 04/01/2009
- um one sided love? thats never fun. but just push on.
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- lildawni - 03/21/2009
- Agreeing with Fridge here, this has potential. The rhyme scheme feels quite forced, though.
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- -x- Fridge -x- - 01/27/2009
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Ok. That came across as kind of harsh.
It's not bad, but it's not fantastic. If you work on it a little more, it could be fantastic. You see what I'm saying? - Report As Spam
- -x- Fridge -x- - 01/26/2009
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I like. :]
However, in second stanza, you rhymed, "you" with "you." >:[
Don't get lazy! It's pretty good but if you tweak it, it could be a lot better. - Report As Spam
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