A Rose for the end

• Artist: ChroniclesOfGrim
• Description: I thought i give another go at this arena stuff. I do love writing poems, but meh i accept criticism. Just if ya totally hate it, and just want to complain i dont make sense. Just dont post at all please.
• Date: 11/29/2008
• Tags: rose

A Rose for the end.

A rose for the morning
A rose for the noon
A Rose for the night
A rose for the end

On my head stone
A shadow waits
A darken memory
A thing of pain

I lay not spoken
in the hollow ground
i reach for morning
but the shadow keeps me down

i go deeper into mind
into my fear i wait
i grab the stars that shine above
only to feel more coldness

I see the lives that gone by
i wish for home
i wish for peace
a simple gravestone i am

so put it on my grave.
put the final call
forget me none but shadows
along the dark do i tread

a rose for the morning
a rose for the noon
a rose for the night
a rose for the end

Comments

[Suicidal_Panda15]

Personally I liked the repetition in Stanza and the last one, i found it to be a nice tie to the end. Yep that is just my thought... i love this.

[Buhatika]

My only criticism: the begining stanza and the end stanza reminded me of a child's poem opening up. Just with how basic it was y'know? I love stanzas 2-6 very moving very image-giving. I don't know what you can do to the other stanzas *shrugs* I mean it fits with it and it sounds fine, just my opinion for the body being so deep the beginning and end are just a little basic for me