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My heart was an empty abyss before I knew you
Every day was spent sitting quietly amongst friends
They laughed, joked, teased, and played
But not me
But then you came along
Your vibrant blond hair and those lovely blue eyes
That gorgeous face and those sweet lips
You captivated my heart right away
I did not confront you,
I was too shy to even consider doing so
But you were the bold one
You talked to me first
Art club was your excuse
You dragged me there after school
Then we walked around town together afterward
I didn't mind, you had my heart on a leash I was willing to follow
Then one day my heart was torn
An old girlfriend that had gotten a hold of me before you let me go
But you were there for me that night
And you took me as your own, to love and care for
You started to mend my heart
Your sweet kisses and kind words doing miracles I never thought possible
I started to become a better person
All the while falling deeper and deeper in love
Then I learned through your trust that you too have had it hard in your life
Your heart broken many more times than I could bear to count
But we were together as one,
So I began to heal you, as you were me
And now here we are
Almost a year away from that day we got together
And one thousand miles separate us
But our bond keeps growing stronger
But now, like before
Even though I have your undying love
My heart feels naught but pain in your absence
And I can only hope that you come back to me
And make our hearts whole once more...
- by Andre The Fox |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/02/2009 |
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- Title: Forever lost...
- Artist: Andre The Fox
- Description: This is a poem about me and the way my heart feels with and without the one I love.
- Date: 07/02/2009
- Tags: forever lost
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Lenore Dirage - 07/05/2009
- Andre, its so beautiful. If only she could read it. Brother im proud of you.
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- RADI0 Mouse - 07/03/2009
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It's a beautiful poem indeed. Your girl's lucky to have you. I've got a few things that didn't charm me, though. Your use of "but" is too close in the first two stanzas, the description of your girl sounds way too generic (girls love it when guys can be specific about what they find beautiful) and your piece has no set rhythm to it.
Try to find a beat that runs through your poem. It'll make it more powerful and beautiful. Consider focusing on a specific aspect of your love's looks. Cheers! - Report As Spam
- Chainerd - 07/03/2009
- this is a beautiful demonstration of your love. I love the truth in this poem, it's blunt and it's honest. good write
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- Queen_Of_The_Demons13 - 07/03/2009
- pure awsomness
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- marushi1 - 07/02/2009
- That's great because I know you in real life ^^ And you said your poems sucked.... you lied
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