With the Beauty of William

• Artist: Esruc
• Description: Does it qualify as a poem to you at all?
  
  Props if you understand the title. ^_~b
  But what I really want is an understood critique.
  
  Thanks! <3
• Date: 11/25/2009
• Tags: beauty

To act-
Or not to act-
Will inevitably be
The end of all humanity.

Comments

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

>_< You read Hamlet? If you have, this reminds me of when he becomes envious of Fortinbras' sense of industry.

Yes, I get the gist of the poem but where are the elements that make it your own?
It's wonderful that you actually think that way and poems don't need to be seven stanzas long in iambic pentameter. (I know I certainly couldn't do that.)
This doesn't seem like it took you much effort.
3/5.